I'm writing a short story for this competition and here are the first few paragraphs, plz rate it and feedback?

If it's raining, the comment about the full moon hiding is out of place. Also "abruptly startled" is a bit redundant. But overall, it's very good - you've established something that catches the reader's attention and has them asking "what happened?" So you've got the hook, the writing is descriptive without being overly verbose, and you've avoided the 12,000 spelling and grammatical errors most common to Y!A. Well done.